1 page Personal statement proofreading

Public Clarification Board

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  KhurramAliShah

  • 1 year ago

  Dear Contest Holder,
  Thank you for rating my entry #17. You are requested to kindly provide feedback about the final version that you need. I have given you 2 different versions with varying length. Please provide some tailored feedback so that I can compile 1 final version for you.
  Thanks

  • 1 year ago
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  sagorchandraF

  • 1 year ago

  I want resubmit my work and it's ready for to show you. If possible give me a chance.

  • 1 year ago
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  Kumarson

  • 1 year ago

  Hello there, there have been many entries added since you last rated some of these, it would help a lot of us immensly if you would read all of the added once and rate them.

  • 1 year ago
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  ShishirA17

  • 1 year ago

  check mine entry #98

  • 1 year ago
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  Zoomer662

  • 1 year ago

  i think #84 would be very much to your liking

  • 1 year ago
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  Kumarson

  • 1 year ago

  Finally finished! Rather than just paraphrasing, i actually added some bits myself, so do give it a read. Hope you like it. Entry number #85

  • 1 year ago
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  steins2017

  • 1 year ago

  Kindly see #82

  • 1 year ago
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  alfrahaanchirag

  • 1 year ago

  Kindly, check entry #60, It has been prepared strictly as per your requirement and can be modified to suit your requirements, if any.

  • 1 year ago
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  KhurramAliShah

  • 1 year ago

  #17

  • 1 year ago
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  LubanRahat

  • 1 year ago

  #12

  • 1 year ago
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  piumisperera1073

  • 1 year ago

  Please check Entry #45

  • 1 year ago
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  WeaselWorks

  • 1 year ago

  Hi, there. It's me again. I really believe you'll improve your letter by adding some niceties, such as your name and maybe even contact info at the very beginning. Maybe you do already intend to add that after you choose a winner here, but that brings up another set of questions...
  
  Because this letter is already busting at the seams, if you add your name or anything else, it will push it to a second page. So, have you been advised by submission guidelines or anything that this letter should only be 1 page long? If yes, did they give any additional guidelines, like it must have 1-inch margins all the way around or a 12-point font?
  
  If that's a bunch of YESes, then we'll also need to trim this down as we edit it, especially if you intend to put your name at the top.

  • 1 year ago
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     WeaselWorks

     • 1 year ago

     If these factors are not considerations at all (like, it can be two pages), then it would be good to know that, too. Then, instead of trimming, we can use more words (though not wastefully), because I think you will not want two pages but only 2-3 lines on the second page.
     
     Oh, and back to niceties, will you be adding a signature line to this after you choose the winning model? If so, I really hope you can have two pages OR I hope you let us know quickly so we can start trimming down the text.
     
     Thank you again ... for the last time.

     • 1 year ago
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  WeaselWorks

  • 1 year ago

  Dear Contest Holder,
  
  I am writing both to let you know that I am on your task and to make an observation: Everyone is twisting themselves into grammar pretzels trying to tie "effective communication skills" in with the rest of the first sentence, but it just doesn't fit.
  
  I mean, there may be some interesting angle in your mind of how effective communication skills played a part in leading you to question the root cause of poor eyesight, but until we hear more from you on that, we can only either cut it or create sentences that will make the people at the college(s), who you need to impress, scratch their heads in confusion.
  
  So, please be open to my more creative approach. Thank you.

  • 1 year ago
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     WeaselWorks

     • 1 year ago

     Oh, and "sensitivity" – again in the first sentence – I forgot to ask above if, by that, do you mean eye sensitivity, or like, you were treated with sensitivity (love and attention) by those in your life, or do you maybe mean that you, yourself, were a very sensitive (alert and caring) child? I think it would really help us all to know, either way, whichever way you meant it, because the possibilities are quite varying. Thank you again.

     • 1 year ago
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  WeaselWorks

  • 1 year ago

  Sir or Ma'am,
  
  How important is it to you to keep British English spelling?
  
  Thank you.

  • 1 year ago
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  toobaijaz97

  • 1 year ago

  kindly check #24

  • 1 year ago
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  toobaijaz97

  • 1 year ago

  #24

  • 1 year ago
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  toobaijaz97

  • 1 year ago

  kindly check 24

  • 1 year ago
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  sagorchandraF

  • 1 year ago

  Please, wait for me. I will come back to you very soon and update you.

  • 1 year ago
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  KhurramAliShah

  • 1 year ago

  Hi. Please see #17

  • 1 year ago
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  Magicianhere

  • 1 year ago

  #4 please check.

  • 1 year ago
  1. 
     Contest Holder

     • 1 year ago

     sorry i send wrong file. please check the new file

     • 1 year ago
  2. 

     Magicianhere

     • 1 year ago

     That's ok. You can check #7 for the new file.

     • 1 year ago

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